DotA Story, Ninja Academy, and More!

thewrongvine

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Here are some of my stories:

DotA: Silence of the Silencer

Background Information: Defense of the Ancients (DotA) is a game/map in Wacraft 3 created by IceFrog. In this custom story I wrote, we follow the trail of Notrom, the Silencer, and his last battle.

Characters:
Notrom the Silencer - a night elf sorcerer who fights for the Alliance. He specializes in silencing enemies, making them unable to cast spells and magic for a while. He is an intellectual fighter.

Rotund' Jere the Necrolyte - an undead necromancer who fights mercilessly for the Scourge. He is a fierce fighter that can weaken enemies and strengthen allies. He is the main enemy Notrom faces in the story.

Kel' Thuzad - a Lich that works ultimately for the Lich King. Long ago, he searched for Malfurion, a powerful night elf druid, and failed. He now returns with to the camp of where Notrom is staying, and sieges them.

Bor Theingrew and Billy Bully - a dwarf and a gnome, these 2 treasure-hunters work for the Alliance but are mostly in for the booty. They go searching for a secret treasure, but instead, cause serious trouble.

Status: Completed

Read the story at: DotA: Silence of the Silencer

Ninja Academy Part One: Rise of a Ninja

Background Information: The first part in my series, Ninja Academy. In this first story, Hotaru Ansari is introduced to us, and when his town is destroyed, events begin to happen in his life.

Characters:
Hotaru Ansari - the main character of the story, Hotaru starts out as a simple farmboy. However, on his birthday, bandits come and his town is slaughtered, him being the only survivor. He leaves home and travels to Konoha where his adventure begins. Hotaru is what you would call stupid.

Ichirou - the other boy in Hotaru's squad. He has a fierce attitude and is one of the top students in their class. Hotaru is always jealous of him, but they sometimes get together.

Aimi - the girl in Hotaru's squad. She is a gentle being, and like Ichirou, finds Hotaru to be annoying and stupid.

Instructor Daichi - the Ninja Academy instructor. Encouraging and kind, Daichi is the teacher for all the beginning ninjas at the Ninja Academy. He always helps Hotaru and the whole class, and is an important ingredient to Hotaru's success.

Grandfather - Hotaru's grandfather, who he finds out is also the president of the Ninja Academy. In this story, Hotaru's grandfather figures out a solution for a very serious problem.

Instructor Katashi - Hotaru's squad leader, Katashi is a powerful (and sarcastic) ninja. Hatake Kakashi is his grandfather (notice I made gap between Gfather, Son, Gson, so I don't change Kakashi's life :D), and inherits some of his abilities.

Unknown Name - As you can see, the 4 ninjas don't know his name yet, but they do know that he's gonna' be a handful. So far, they learn that this man can use fire techniques, and knows basic ninja skills.

Status: Complete

Read the Story at:
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Ninja Academy Part Two: The Demon Awakens

Background Information: This is part two of the Ninja Academy series. Here, we will follow the finishing of the fight from the first book. As you can tell from the title, Hotaru's secret demon finally awakens. The secrets will be revealed.

Characters:
Same as Book One.
New Characters Introduced:
Natsuki: a follower of the Tsuki (moon) clan formed by an unknown man. This rogue ninja is a a vicious fighter with powerful strength and sneaky tactics. The squad finds out that he is just as devilish as his smile...
Unknown Owl: a strange owl that always seems to be where there is trouble.
Unknown Man: a strange man that wears the same clothing as Natsuki with yellow moons instead. He is seen with the owl in the end.

Status: Complete

Ninja Academy Part Three: The Tsuki Clan

Background Information: The fight continues and the Tsuki clan finally takes action...

Update: Chapter Eighteen [19] is out!

New Characters Introduced:
Mariko Uchiha - a young boy of about age 16. Hotaru found him being chased by another man, and befriended him. His parents were killed and he has been journeying since. He contains the 'Sharingan'.

Read the story at:
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Don't forget to reply and review! Thank you!

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Hope you like the stories!
Credit to Geoff.L.! He's the one who made me edit it into this way, and he helped improve my writing skills.
 

Fatmankev

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Yo bro, I read your DotA story, and it wasn't too bad. In my opinion, you shouldn't have any chapters dividing the story up, because it makes it sort of choppy. If I were you, I'd take them out and just make it a nice short story, maybe adding a little more detail and fixing some grammar and word placement mistakes. Decent little story, though, and I liked Nortrom's final spell. Take that, undead man!
 

thewrongvine

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lol, do you mean take out the chapters
and make it one continuious story throughout whole thing?
I'll try that, thanks for taking the time to read it.

By the way... did you, oh just a wild thought, happen to have read the other story? lol. :D
 

Fatmankev

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Haha, nah, I didn't actaully. It said it was unfinished, so I figured that if I didn't read it until then, it would just give you more incentive to get to work. :D Yeah, that's why I didn't read it... yeah...

But I'll definitely read it some time bro, which of your two stories do you prefer more?
 

thewrongvine

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My Ninja Academy.

My DotA story was written about a year ago so my grammar back then was horrible. Of course I went over it, but I wouldn't catch everything.

It's hard to make long, good stories that are original these days, and that's Ninja Academy's downfall.

But i prefer Ninja Acad.

EDITED. For information on book two, scroll up to the first reply.
 

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"Hope you like the stories!
Credit to Geoff.L.! He's the one who made me edit it into this way, and he helped improve my writing skills. Check out his thread on Ambivalent Existances, for his laptop was taken away! "

Guess who's back? :D

Thanks a lot! But you didn't really need to give me credit, after all, it was your story that you took the time to write, not me. I'm just someone who likes to read :rolleyes:
 

thewrongvine

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"Hope you like the stories!
Credit to Geoff.L.! He's the one who made me edit it into this way, and he helped improve my writing skills. Check out his thread on Ambivalent Existances, for his laptop was taken away! "

Guess who's back? :D

Thanks a lot! But you didn't really need to give me credit, after all, it was your story that you took the time to write, not me. I'm just someone who likes to read :rolleyes:

WOOOO YOU'RE BACK! HOORAH! HOORAH! HOORAH!

Can't wait for your updates!

Oh yeah, on my stories topic: I finished the story.
 

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now thats totally awesome.
w00t, number two coming out soon eh?
can\t wait/.
finishing off the Ninja Academy right now...
 

thewrongvine

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lol, someone on fictionpress called Basta emailed me...
he said something like

"I like the idea but i want to ask if you mind me rewriting chapter 3" o_O
 

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o_O?!
...:confused:... Uh?

Lol, at the least, think of it like this. People are out there reading your story.

But.... rewriting Chapter 3? ._.?
 

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yea, i didn't get that either.
O__o?
well, your work is protected by copyright stuff provided by the fictionpress.net staff. He must ask you if he can alter anything.
 

thewrongvine

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o_______O did you finish reading it? lol

i remember your riddle but i jsut cant figure it out...

constructive critism ploxigar.

and some ideas for book two... :D
 

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im "patiently" waiting for the 2nd one :p [I read it off your freewebs]

now for the constuctive input, they are in my review.

[btw, reviews get therough after a day or so :eek:]
 

thewrongvine

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If you see the new edit, the first chapter of the second book will soon be out.

Also, I was wondering if anyone could help me with a problem:

Can anyone draw me one (or some) pictures for my story. Someone who knows how to draw anime, lol. It doesn't have to be too good, just so you can see it and... yeah...
 

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-raises hand up-

though it might take a couple of days to get ONE drawing out. [Inking and Scanning and rehatching and correction...]

also, I have found out that i draw girls better then boys. o_O

i have a *good* idea of what they look like, but it may differ from what you may picture them.

I'm done my drawing for Hybrid, Metreon, Dark Hybrid, and Silpheed for my story, though you may not know all of these characters yet :p

photobucket apparantly hates me and won't process my request, ill try later to upload my drawings so you can see what they look like.\

EDIT: did you see my review of the story? it doesn't look like its there...
EDIT 2: I reposted it, something must've happened.

I gave it a 24/30 on a scoring thing, it is a pretty good story that grabs your interest and leaves you wanting [alot] more.
w00t! 1st chapter of 2nd story arc. t3h p\/\/n4ge!
 

thewrongvine

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Look next post please...

I'll get the details of the drawing later, thank you for... raising your hand lol.

And I did read your review, thank you for the positive input and the constructive critism, I'll change some things when I can.

ALSO

Ninja Academy Part Two Chapters Nine and Ten are out. Eleven will be out tomorrow, Friday.

UPDATE: Chapter Eleven is out!

Chapter Twelve will be out next Friday, 2/29/08!

Please comment and review.
 

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Yo bro, I read your DotA story, and it wasn't too bad. In my opinion, you shouldn't have any chapters dividing the story up, because it makes it sort of choppy. If I were you, I'd take them out and just make it a nice short story, maybe adding a little more detail and fixing some grammar and word placement mistakes. Decent little story, though, and I liked Nortrom's final spell. Take that, undead man!

Or atleast call them something else then chapters. Maybe fragments where there only separated by a line or something :D

the stories are good so far but i haven't finished watching them
 

thewrongvine

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Or atleast call them something else then chapters. Maybe fragments where there only separated by a line or something :D

the stories are good so far but i haven't finished watching them

Yeah, lol, ive been meaning to change that but im too lazy and that DotA story is an old one that i havent worked on for a LOONG time. Maybe i do it tomorrow when i come home from school...

>but i haven't finished watching them

??? :confused: ???

you mean reading them? lol. :nuts: jK :D

but thank you for the compliment!

Correction: Chapter Twelve is out.

Chapter Thirteen will be done by Friday but I might have it out tomorrow, Thursday.
 

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w00t!
first of all, i can't wait XD
second of all, i can host. but only on weekends.
third of all, im hatching your pic Aimu.
 
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