You sir, win!
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Btw, we should definitely revise the next four chapters we've done before posting them. Get vine!
And yes, 87 average. FML.
Yea, yea I get it.
Now, finish YOUR 2nd chapter lol, it's your turn = =
all right, we finally posted it. it is done.
It's up. Gotta finish my chapter now - -.
You.
Post it up.
Nice, I like it.
Some minor grammar errors, and general things I'd say is to vary your vocabulary (like you use "illuminated 3 or 4 times in this first page, maybe say 'light up' or something) and keep your tenses right, you sometimes switched from past to present, etc.
Anyways, it's great and suspenseful. The ending there was good, like a lose-win-lose-win thing o.o :thup:
Hows the you know wut wut going
It's not for sale anymore.
Yo. Let's post it.
:O I wait ur orders.
NOT
lol, alright can't wait,
yo, stop hogging my internet you n00b.
ok, tmr ill show you something.
AND you DID get miz involved...
no more people man, it's not cool when more then two person beta's it.
...of course you would -rolls eyes-
sent it to your email, check it over.
I am sorry I just have bad personal memory. Could you please remind me who you are, please Don't feel insulted by this. <3
crap, gave you the incomplete version, hang o-
you're not involving miz too are you?
hi?
it's almost done
almost...
Idk... I think... jk ehehe.
K, I await teh new one.
You make the post, you've got the first chapter anyways.
That's after he's done betaing. -
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