Bella, though she is a distinct character, is only distinct because she falls under the characteristics of a Mary-Sue. A character who is perfect in many ways, and her flaws are too simplistic.
I believe that the main reason why her books took off the way that they did is because Stephanie...
If you want to change the repetition of the he and his, you can substitute the man in here and there, or maybe even give the reader his name. That also makes the third person point of view more omniscient, that the narrator would have the name when the other characters don't.
The only problem...
It depends on how I'm writing.
If it's for one of my classes, I just write the first thing that comes to mind for the prompt.
If I'm writing for myself, I have an idea and I brainstorm about it in a notebook before I jump to the computer and start typing stuff out, as I write I brainstorm...
I like the stream-of-conciousness feeling to this story.
Though the ending is ambigous, what exactly is going on in the story? How can the main character tell that the tattoo is perfect for the girl if he hasn't spoken to her?
Overall, it's a good story, but it need some more details.
I like the formatting of this too. The longer sentences with smaller ones breaking it up to tapering off at the end.
What you're actually saying is very interesting. The first two lines are fascinating and they draw you farther into the poem to the second stanza that captures you to the end.