Mental Diseases are Diseases

tooltiperror

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Instant Relief
I feel the tube shape,
and I take a deep breath in.
The perfect white body,
almost calms me, tells me that
it is alright. I pick up the glass
of water, and I plop the tube
in my mouth, and take a deep
gulp. Because that's what I do,
swallow my fear with a pain killer,
and throw away my feeling,
with an aspirin.
For what else am I to do,
but drown my emotions
in a cup,
and wait.

Rest
I look in the mirror,
and do not like what I see.
A weak and spineless person,
staring back at me.
I take the sominex in my hand,
and it lands in my throat as it gushes
down in a river of water, and
begins to do its job on my
inner workings.
For what am I to do,
but take another pill,
I can not fall asleep, with
life going on around me?

When
When life is so precious,
so precious indeed, that you
realize what keeps it going,
is the food you eat. So you
stop, and do not eat, to make
that small act even more precious.
One apple in two weeks, and a
water bottle to get you through
the day.​

Churning 'em out.
 

sevin

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Grow up..

Our mind grow up should be gradually increase according to our body grow..
Keep our mind fresh mode at all occasion to avoid mental disorders..
 

Blackveiled

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I understand the meanings of each poem you made, but you should change them. I couldn't help but notice errors in them which stopped me from reading. Good effort though.
 

Durandal

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Our mind grow up should be gradually increase according to our body grow..
Keep our mind fresh mode at all occasion to avoid mental disorders..

Please, do learn about these things before you go spouting off ignorant nonsense

Some people are born with mental disorders, you can't always just 'develop' them, or 'avoid them' that is pure poppycock
 

Ninva

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I liked the poem.

On a side note, these things exist. If they didn't, people wouldn't commit suicide or murder anyone. There are ways to heal yourself, but then again, there are ways to destroy yourself. Mental illnesses are complicated.
 

Fatmankev

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The first poem was pretty good, especially the final four lines; it was very nicely worded and spaced, and left somewhat of an impact after I'd read it. Made me go back and read it again :p

The second, I cared for less... it sounded more like an emo-kid whining to me, for some reason. No offense, that's just how it came off.

The third poem had a very interesting topic, however I feel you could have done a much better job on it if you'd given it a little more time.
 
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