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Bella, though she is a distinct character, is only distinct because she falls under the characteristics of a Mary-Sue. A character who is perfect in many ways, and her flaws are too simplistic. I believe that the main reason why her books took off the way that they did is because Stephanie...

This is a great scene to open up with, though I think that you should definitely go somewhere with it. It raises the right questions to keep the reader going to find the answers to those questions.

A good site to get names from is behindthename.com. It has a search for the meanings and has a wider selection to choose from, as well as letting you know exactly what it comes from and what it means.

Can't wait to see where you're going with this.

Either a very small, highly cute little ball of fuzz known as a kitten. Or a tiger.

If you want to change the repetition of the he and his, you can substitute the man in here and there, or maybe even give the reader his name. That also makes the third person point of view more omniscient, that the narrator would have the name when the other characters don't. The only problem...

Can I have number 23 please?

I really like this, are you going to continue to work on it?

It depends on how I'm writing. If it's for one of my classes, I just write the first thing that comes to mind for the prompt. If I'm writing for myself, I have an idea and I brainstorm about it in a notebook before I jump to the computer and start typing stuff out, as I write I brainstorm...

I was wondering if I could get the #3 box.

Very good, I like it. The imagry is very powerful.

I like the stream-of-conciousness feeling to this story. Though the ending is ambigous, what exactly is going on in the story? How can the main character tell that the tattoo is perfect for the girl if he hasn't spoken to her? Overall, it's a good story, but it need some more details.

That is more disturbing than useful. What if he had someone in his house that didn't know about that finger, and he just left it connected to his computer?

I like the formatting of this too. The longer sentences with smaller ones breaking it up to tapering off at the end. What you're actually saying is very interesting. The first two lines are fascinating and they draw you farther into the poem to the second stanza that captures you to the end.

I really liked the formatting that you use for this poem, it gives the subject matter a more laid-back feel, even though what you are saying within the poem is actually serious.

The rhyme scheme feels a little forced. You have each stanza rhyming together gives it a more lighthearted feel, though in the first stanza you ahve a different rhyme scheme than the others. If you break up the rhymes a bit more it would flow better and the lines would feel less forced. I...

From the previews that I've seen he has the bone claws before he gets the adamantium ones.

This is going to do nothing for these "lesbians" because it would just drive them farther away from men. But what proof do they have that these women are lesbians, it could also just be them justifying raping some poor girl and covering their own butts. How do they choose the women that they...

That makes sense. Or since the painting was done it was put away until the next time it's taken out for the next painting.

I'm planning on seeing this when it finally hits theaters. As for the role of Wolverine, I couldn't really think of anyone that could play a better Wolverine. Jackman in the past has mixed the "i don't care, so why should i" with "so maybe i do care" attitudes of wolverine nicely. He always has...