Monsterous
In the Shadows, Lurking.
- Reaction score
- 99
Did this for english, wanted to see what you thought of it.
I looked at my surroundings. Merely a beach, but looking deeper... is a different thing altogether.
I looked once more, and heard the silent echo of the lifeless sea, as if it had sucked out the souls of nearby creatures, as if it was a forever-hungering beast, relentlessly pounding the beach with no remorse. The sand between my toes felt dead, lusting for the warmth of the Sun. Its odd blackish colour contemplating with the fact that this was a lifeless beach. The smell was pungent of seaweed, as if essences of it was part of the very air, and growing like a tree every second. The cliffs to the left and right of myself were seemless, untouched, as if just erected; as the echo stopped, I heard another sound, a sound so surprising, yet fall of beauty and horror.
The Silence.
My english teacher thought it was excellent, but wanted to see how it could be improved
I looked at my surroundings. Merely a beach, but looking deeper... is a different thing altogether.
I looked once more, and heard the silent echo of the lifeless sea, as if it had sucked out the souls of nearby creatures, as if it was a forever-hungering beast, relentlessly pounding the beach with no remorse. The sand between my toes felt dead, lusting for the warmth of the Sun. Its odd blackish colour contemplating with the fact that this was a lifeless beach. The smell was pungent of seaweed, as if essences of it was part of the very air, and growing like a tree every second. The cliffs to the left and right of myself were seemless, untouched, as if just erected; as the echo stopped, I heard another sound, a sound so surprising, yet fall of beauty and horror.
The Silence.
My english teacher thought it was excellent, but wanted to see how it could be improved