Do you know who am I?

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Do you know who am I?​

Who am I?

Smith slowly pushed the room’s door with his sophisticated XXVI century weapon. A weak squeal echoed through the evacuated installation of the planet Nerios.
However, inside they only found another morbid room, filled with odd experiments – a typical genetics chamber.
“There’s nothing here, general… We’ve been searching for hours and found nothing in these damned laboratories”, the captain’s voice shouted in the control room’s speakers.
“Damn it, captain! Understand that what are you searching for has maximum importance for the Genetics Department. And if we don’t find their experiment, I’m going to be the one to be served to dinner to the commanders, not you!”
Smith grumbled something for himself and called the other two soldiers, his team, after him.
“Let’s go on… Stupid general, let him come here and search if he wants to keep his medals!”
The captain nearly finished his phrase, when a huge piece burst from the right wall, squashing one of the soldiers to the wall. From the hole, a horrible creature came out. Smith let loose the wrath of his weapon, killing the monster in a bath of blood.
“General, if you want to find your little animal, move your ass down here, I ain’t going to kill myself for your titles!”
“Smith, for this boldness you’re going to be a miner in the crystal mines from Titan tomorrow! Come immediately at the central ro-“
A scream rend the general’s ears.
God damn those mad experiments…, thought the general.
“Send another team there and don’t forget to give them better equipment!”, yelled the general at one of the operators.
Where in the hell is that thing?...

Who am I?

“Sir, I have searched the entire installation, but we have not found the target. Are you sure that she is still alive?”
“General, we have not been giving you this mission, without being sure that she is death or not. Finding her has maximum importance. I hope that you understand that your titles hang on this mission. In fact, if she escapes, nothing will matter, anyway.”
The monitor turned black, as black as the general’s expression.
Fuck this little doctor…
“Operator, put the today records again, there must be something… The experiment couldn’t simply disappear…”
For maybe a hundredth time, the general watched the records, seeing how one of the worst days of his life began. Nothing was out of its place on the records, everything was according to the each-day routine.
And then, the general saw a man without identifying card.
Found you!

Who am I?

There was only a matter of time until the general found out who is the intruder, where he lives and everything else that the government could know about somebody.
But the job of the general became difficult again, when he found, with his soldiers, inside of the house, the body of Adrian Vens, the suspect.
During a few hours, the soldiers turned the guy’s house upside down, while a specialist was searching Vens’ computer for information.
“General…” said the specialist with a weak voice. “Vens arranged so the experiment was taken out of the installation with an evacuation shuttle.”
“Fuck… quick, send order to the headquarters to deploy all forces in all Union installations and start the quarantine! We’re screwed…”
A communications operator came with a portable monitor.
“General, you are being searched for.”
The monitor turned on to show doctor Metias’ face, the general’s boss.
“General, I have just found out that you have given orders for quarantine. May I know what the hell happens?”
“I am sorry to inform you that the experiment is no longer on the Nerios planet. A man called Adrian Vens managed to take it out from our hands… I thought that the situation requires quarantine.”
“General, if you don’t bring me the experiment back, I will rip off your head! There is no need to tell you that if this creatures reaches its full potential outside of our management, the entire humanity is in danger!”

Who am I?

The question echoed inside the mind of the creature. Alone. Isolated. Trapped on one of the Union’s far colonies. The rooms of the installation showed a terrifying sight, filled with blood, guts and bones. The monster, in its loneliness, was slowly licking its hands, covered with blood. Long, sharp claws were ending the weird boned hands. The horrifying face, with unusual dints, was still keeping a shadow of the beautiful woman, the victim of the old scary experiments. But the memories of the agony were erased from the monster’s mind long ago.
A sound lured the strange eyes to the door. An shinny space suit came from behind of the door. The creature prepared to attack, but the sight of the long forgotten loved man stopped her for a second.

I know who I am.

“I know who I am!” shouted her, cutting the head of the soldier.

By Smith​

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Please comment on the story. Not meant to be a chapter of anything, might become later, now it's just a short story, made for a contest. Please correct any of my language mistakes, I want to make my english better. Thanks in advance :).
 

Chocobo

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“Smith, for this boldness you’re going to be a miner in the crystal mines from Titan tomorrow! Come immediately at the central ro-“
God damn those mad experiments…, thought the general.
“Send another team there and don’t forget to give them better equipment!”, yelled the general at one of the operators.
Where in the hell is that thing?...

xD :p
 

Jindo

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I don't get it either :p, maybe Chocobo has a dirty mind o_O, or was somehow relating to manhoods.

Anyway, nice story, people should do more of these shorts here, it's quite fun to read (and I hate reading =P).
 

Halahan

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Great.
Add more foreshadowing, or even explain more, to confused. I know your going to say adds suspense or something but just a ilttle will take away almost no suspense but will still help a ton.

At the end, describe the monster more, and clarify all the genders slightly more.

But really great.
 

monoVertex

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No, I don't follow to add suspense by less detail, it's just my way to write stories. I try to get my stories more detailed each time I write something, but, in the end, I still missed something xD. Anyway, I've done the second part in romanian, I'll translate it these days.
 
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