LiveSsenkrad
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Hey guys I often indulge myself in writing poetry, but I'm not sure how good I am! I would like any kind of criticism, even if you don't like it! It would be greatly appreciated
I wrote this when I felt unsure whether God exists or not, as I was slipping into doubt and away from religion, in the form of an Elizabethan Sonnet.
A fire burning excitedly bright
Dulls through time
A sight once so perfectly white
Now a hollow chime.
A passionate belief now blackened
No sight of miraculous revival
Futile attempts now abandoned
A losing fight for survival
The cries of a harlot seems clear
Morals erased by eroded belief
No regret saved for lacking fear
Always waiting for impossible relief
Inevitably the battle is hopelessly lost
Never to be found whatever the cost.
I wrote this when I felt unsure whether God exists or not, as I was slipping into doubt and away from religion, in the form of an Elizabethan Sonnet.
A fire burning excitedly bright
Dulls through time
A sight once so perfectly white
Now a hollow chime.
A passionate belief now blackened
No sight of miraculous revival
Futile attempts now abandoned
A losing fight for survival
The cries of a harlot seems clear
Morals erased by eroded belief
No regret saved for lacking fear
Always waiting for impossible relief
Inevitably the battle is hopelessly lost
Never to be found whatever the cost.