Squll2
je'ne sais pas
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well, i just felt like writing something, its not that great, please constructive criticism, probably some bad english is some places to but ye, you get the point anyway, here is chapter one, dont want to reveal the prologue or chapter two yet wanna make sure this is written well first. 
hope you enjoyed
edit: cleaned up some english mistakes, like u, i, etc...
"Hey watch where your going jerk" I turned around as I saw a younger kid get slammed into a locker and watched as the bullies walked on like it was an accident. Without thinking it through properly my mind registered a redemption plan. as they walked past I stuck out my foot and tripped the one who had pushed the younger kid "Oof" I heard the air come out of his useless waste of a body as he slammed into the matted wooden floor and then without another moment, not even enough for breath I burst into a run trying to make as much distance in the seconds of surprise I still had left. "hey get back here you dirty scum, ill hurt you less if you come to me straight away" I heard other lies shouting after me, but I ignored them as I carefully but slyly dodged the crowds of people in the hallway who had stopped to see what was going on. I stopped and leaned on my knees for a quick breath as I also naturally quickly took a scan of my surrondings. after a second of rest I proceded to take a left dodging some kids sorting out their unorganised lockers. I slid down a wet patch on the carpet matted floor and looked behind. The kids were still trying to sort out their lockers before the general inspection, they hadn't looked down the hall, which was a good sign there was noone rushing after me, also I couldn't hear anything either. After a minute of relaxation I headed backed to my locker but made sure to take a wide route around my escape path.
I heard the bell ring and quickened my pace, I heard someone say "good one" to me from somewhere to my right but ignored it and countiued on my path to my locker. I threw out my bags and quickened my pace into a run and got to class just in the brink of time.
from then to the rest of day at school were just classes, boring old maths then english with an old bat for a teacher called miss.chlor who shouted at else for any reason I mean excuse we gave her, like tapping our foot for example. We had a nice teacher at the end of the day for literacy though, his name was mr.hutchens or he let us call him hutch for short when in class, the class curriculum was extremly boring but hutch somehow made it funnier, constantly chatting to us about stories, sitting on his desk and talking like we were his best friends. also giving us heart-warming breaks off work occasionally just to talk to each other.
After school I hit a came of basketball up with the crew, me Kar and Dani boy at the local basketball court next to our school night'intermediate. The basket-ball courts were regular size and clean, no litter or rubbish. There were however no wall surronding the court. The oppsition started with the ball.
We whisked past the opposing team of some 7th graders and won with an impressing 44-32 even though we were only 6th graders and they were easily more built then us, I guess technic pays off after all eh?
We walked home together as always, we only lived a few streets apart anyway and they could short cut down alleyway's from my house to theirs. Anyway I should tell you who I am, im a 6th grader and im 13 years old my name is Andy, but everyone calls me Anda for some reason.. they just called me that the first day I came to Night'intermediate and it stuck. I guess your wondering who "they" is, well thatd be Daniel(dani boy) and Kar (kool name huh?) my best friends for as long as I've been here.
"uh oh look whos happened to stumble across the pathway infront of us" Daniel notioned to Ghan, the bully who I had tripped my up earlier "Split & dip or Rush?" I asked, Ghan was someone who you wouldnt want to see on a scale but luckly he was more fat then muscle but he also had at least 5-6 croonies around as well so that was an issue to think about too. But the answer was obvious so I held up my hands with 3 fingers showing, lowered one and then we hit it full speed ahead right at him and his croonies.
I hit him straight in the chest with the element of surprise yet again on my side. it sent him sprawling back dazed slightly, I took that chance and spun around and hit his leg from under him as I watched him crumble making sure I had a few seconds to do so, I turned around and anaylzed the situation quickly but accuratly. Then sent a spirling elbow towards one of the two croonies that were all over dani boy as he sent a foot inbetween the others legs I took another chance to look around and saw Kar taking 3 on his own.. taking them with ease i saw one fly over his back and then another fall to the ground and the last took a flying leap at him but he just dodged and the croonie landed flat face first on the ground, I started to turn and felt a fist hit me right in the face and hit the deck and everything went black.
Next thing I knew I was at my house lying on my couch Kar and dani boy not in sight. I sat there for awhile only hearing the water rushing and splashing onto plates as they were obviously being cleaned in the kitchen. after another little peroid of time I stood up and uncurled my hair which had been crushed while I was lying there and walked over to the open kitchen door and saw my mum there by the sink next to the stove, she turned her head and stated plainly "oh your awake". I asked what happened and she replied "Daniel and Kar came over and came in with you with one arm around each of their necks and placed you on the couch, they said you would explain if you wondering" she countiued dryly looking at me then looked back to the dishes, she didn't even need to say it, she just waited.. after about 30 seconds of wordlessness I explained the events of the day right from when i got to school.
My mum knew me well and wasnt that kind of person, so she didnt bother yelling or shouting she just gave me some extra chores and a few weeks off my pocket money. I headed upstairs to do my homework and clean my room among other chores so I could go to the movies with Kar and Dani as we had planned later - my mum forbidded me doing anything without me completing chores and if I went anywhere without doing them she'd just lock me outta the house and wouldn't let me in when I came back. at 6 Dani arrived at my house and we headed over to Kar's place.. I had the funniest sense of dejavu but snapped out of it when i saw Kar who was already on his way over to ours then we headed off to the movie theater in town.
I asked what had happened after I blacked out, they explained to me how ghan had sprinted off while they were judging up how badly hurt I was, Ghan's Mates were still there on the ground but they didn't give them trouble so they just hefted me on their shoulders and walked me back to my house which wasn't that far from the fight scene.
The Movie theatre in town was 3 kilometres from my house so it wasnt much of a walk, we passed a few troublesome people but managed to get there unharmed which isnt unusual we always come at this kind of night and dont get any trouble though I thought we probably normally should judging by our cloths and size I think we would have been a target.
We arrived at the theatres after a short discussion on how boring school was and why we even bothered going. "3 tickets to James bond please", "hey they got a new game in the arcade" Dani pointed out, which pretty much meant we were going there after we got our tickets to 'check it out', Dani was a big fan of the arcade games, specially time crisis and games like such. After exhanging our money and getting change with our tickets we walked over to the arcade oppsite the ticket counter and looked at the game. It was a new racing game with up to 4 people able to battle each other in one go. We had a try, I picked a mitsubishu Lancer, Dani picked a modest-looking Honda Supre and Kar went with a Subaru Impreza, we picked a medium rated course with lots of 180 degree turns and went for a night-rainy racing scenerio. 3, 2, 1 and we were off I got in the lead to start with a nice gear change on my behalf, Dani came up behind me at the first corner and hit my wheel almost spinning me out which I responded by hitting him back forcing him to crash into the side while Kar smoothly passed us. We forgot about our battle and speed off to catch up to Kar, he was still in the lead half way through the 2nd of 2 laps but we caught him on a series of turns and both smashed into either side of him spinning him up but he quickly got control and came back after us. Meanwhile Dani hit me into a bad position and I had to take the corner slow which gave him a big boost. Kar passed me before the next corner as I slowly started to re-accelerate and looked like he would catch up to Dani. I saw a spinning Supre coming heading in my direction on my screen and took a wild turn to avoid it. speed around another corner then finished the race in 2nd Dani soon coming up for 3rd place. "Hey no fair guys! you started before I was ready" Dani is a bit of a sore loser but not that bad, thats a pretty bad excuse though seeing as we dont start the race it automatically does. We headed into the movies for a solid watch and got what we came for. We walked home afterwards chatting about arcade games and Sports. When i got home it was 9 o'clock so I watched some old simpsons episodes that we have on TV for a hour or so and then headed for bed.
I heard the bell ring and quickened my pace, I heard someone say "good one" to me from somewhere to my right but ignored it and countiued on my path to my locker. I threw out my bags and quickened my pace into a run and got to class just in the brink of time.
from then to the rest of day at school were just classes, boring old maths then english with an old bat for a teacher called miss.chlor who shouted at else for any reason I mean excuse we gave her, like tapping our foot for example. We had a nice teacher at the end of the day for literacy though, his name was mr.hutchens or he let us call him hutch for short when in class, the class curriculum was extremly boring but hutch somehow made it funnier, constantly chatting to us about stories, sitting on his desk and talking like we were his best friends. also giving us heart-warming breaks off work occasionally just to talk to each other.
After school I hit a came of basketball up with the crew, me Kar and Dani boy at the local basketball court next to our school night'intermediate. The basket-ball courts were regular size and clean, no litter or rubbish. There were however no wall surronding the court. The oppsition started with the ball.
We whisked past the opposing team of some 7th graders and won with an impressing 44-32 even though we were only 6th graders and they were easily more built then us, I guess technic pays off after all eh?
We walked home together as always, we only lived a few streets apart anyway and they could short cut down alleyway's from my house to theirs. Anyway I should tell you who I am, im a 6th grader and im 13 years old my name is Andy, but everyone calls me Anda for some reason.. they just called me that the first day I came to Night'intermediate and it stuck. I guess your wondering who "they" is, well thatd be Daniel(dani boy) and Kar (kool name huh?) my best friends for as long as I've been here.
"uh oh look whos happened to stumble across the pathway infront of us" Daniel notioned to Ghan, the bully who I had tripped my up earlier "Split & dip or Rush?" I asked, Ghan was someone who you wouldnt want to see on a scale but luckly he was more fat then muscle but he also had at least 5-6 croonies around as well so that was an issue to think about too. But the answer was obvious so I held up my hands with 3 fingers showing, lowered one and then we hit it full speed ahead right at him and his croonies.
I hit him straight in the chest with the element of surprise yet again on my side. it sent him sprawling back dazed slightly, I took that chance and spun around and hit his leg from under him as I watched him crumble making sure I had a few seconds to do so, I turned around and anaylzed the situation quickly but accuratly. Then sent a spirling elbow towards one of the two croonies that were all over dani boy as he sent a foot inbetween the others legs I took another chance to look around and saw Kar taking 3 on his own.. taking them with ease i saw one fly over his back and then another fall to the ground and the last took a flying leap at him but he just dodged and the croonie landed flat face first on the ground, I started to turn and felt a fist hit me right in the face and hit the deck and everything went black.
Next thing I knew I was at my house lying on my couch Kar and dani boy not in sight. I sat there for awhile only hearing the water rushing and splashing onto plates as they were obviously being cleaned in the kitchen. after another little peroid of time I stood up and uncurled my hair which had been crushed while I was lying there and walked over to the open kitchen door and saw my mum there by the sink next to the stove, she turned her head and stated plainly "oh your awake". I asked what happened and she replied "Daniel and Kar came over and came in with you with one arm around each of their necks and placed you on the couch, they said you would explain if you wondering" she countiued dryly looking at me then looked back to the dishes, she didn't even need to say it, she just waited.. after about 30 seconds of wordlessness I explained the events of the day right from when i got to school.
My mum knew me well and wasnt that kind of person, so she didnt bother yelling or shouting she just gave me some extra chores and a few weeks off my pocket money. I headed upstairs to do my homework and clean my room among other chores so I could go to the movies with Kar and Dani as we had planned later - my mum forbidded me doing anything without me completing chores and if I went anywhere without doing them she'd just lock me outta the house and wouldn't let me in when I came back. at 6 Dani arrived at my house and we headed over to Kar's place.. I had the funniest sense of dejavu but snapped out of it when i saw Kar who was already on his way over to ours then we headed off to the movie theater in town.
I asked what had happened after I blacked out, they explained to me how ghan had sprinted off while they were judging up how badly hurt I was, Ghan's Mates were still there on the ground but they didn't give them trouble so they just hefted me on their shoulders and walked me back to my house which wasn't that far from the fight scene.
The Movie theatre in town was 3 kilometres from my house so it wasnt much of a walk, we passed a few troublesome people but managed to get there unharmed which isnt unusual we always come at this kind of night and dont get any trouble though I thought we probably normally should judging by our cloths and size I think we would have been a target.
We arrived at the theatres after a short discussion on how boring school was and why we even bothered going. "3 tickets to James bond please", "hey they got a new game in the arcade" Dani pointed out, which pretty much meant we were going there after we got our tickets to 'check it out', Dani was a big fan of the arcade games, specially time crisis and games like such. After exhanging our money and getting change with our tickets we walked over to the arcade oppsite the ticket counter and looked at the game. It was a new racing game with up to 4 people able to battle each other in one go. We had a try, I picked a mitsubishu Lancer, Dani picked a modest-looking Honda Supre and Kar went with a Subaru Impreza, we picked a medium rated course with lots of 180 degree turns and went for a night-rainy racing scenerio. 3, 2, 1 and we were off I got in the lead to start with a nice gear change on my behalf, Dani came up behind me at the first corner and hit my wheel almost spinning me out which I responded by hitting him back forcing him to crash into the side while Kar smoothly passed us. We forgot about our battle and speed off to catch up to Kar, he was still in the lead half way through the 2nd of 2 laps but we caught him on a series of turns and both smashed into either side of him spinning him up but he quickly got control and came back after us. Meanwhile Dani hit me into a bad position and I had to take the corner slow which gave him a big boost. Kar passed me before the next corner as I slowly started to re-accelerate and looked like he would catch up to Dani. I saw a spinning Supre coming heading in my direction on my screen and took a wild turn to avoid it. speed around another corner then finished the race in 2nd Dani soon coming up for 3rd place. "Hey no fair guys! you started before I was ready" Dani is a bit of a sore loser but not that bad, thats a pretty bad excuse though seeing as we dont start the race it automatically does. We headed into the movies for a solid watch and got what we came for. We walked home afterwards chatting about arcade games and Sports. When i got home it was 9 o'clock so I watched some old simpsons episodes that we have on TV for a hour or so and then headed for bed.
hope you enjoyed
edit: cleaned up some english mistakes, like u, i, etc...
