[One-Shot Idea] Helios

[Syndrome]

This was the idea that has been on my mind for quite a while. I have stopped working on Ambivalent Existance for a while to try to get this idea portrayed, but since I finished the idea, I shall work on AE now.

Setting: A bit into the future.

Genre: Adventure, Sci-Fi [ish if it is continued]

Helios can be read here:
http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2528903/1/Helios

Keep in mind that it is an idea, not a full story. If a lot of people like the idea then I will work on that too.

Post Comments/Criticism here:

 

[thewrongvine]

Woah! This looks amazing. I must admit that this one is more interesting than Ambivalent Existance (a little ), maybe because I've read that so many times. But still, there's improvement in this and it's a great idea. :thup:

Btw, where'd the boy and girl get the rifles and grenades? Maybe I missed it...

 

[Syndrome]

Haha, hey thewrongvine
Akira got the rifle from a dead soldier flung through a window.
Kioshi [who is actually a boy ] got his grenades from somewhere that was not explained, but it was pretty clear a lot of soldiers were killed so he could've salvaged them.

:thup:

Thanks for the R&R thewrongvine!