Poetry Contest 3

Discussion in 'The Writer's Corner' started by hortononon, Jul 29, 2007.

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  1. Halahan

    Halahan To die will be an awfully big adventure.

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    I might enter :)
    I realized I'm not too good a poet. If I work on it though, I could be. Just submitting it into this won't get much done
    Sorry for the huge amount of crazed fans that I'm letting down. <3
     
  2. Zakyath

    Zakyath Member

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    Well, my last poem turned to shit <3 I'll use it as lyrics instead

    So I'd guess I won't enter this contest ^^
     
  3. Gman101112

    Gman101112 New Member

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    do u mind if i join i got a good idea for a peom that fits the criteria well
     
  4. Gman101112

    Gman101112 New Member

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    ok i got my peom and i feel it is coming from the heart well here it is...



    The one I love
    Why do I upset her so?
    Just a mistake I made
    Trying to make a joke

    As she walks away
    I feel the pain
    I follow her but I can’t make her stay
    She runs where I can’t go

    Trying to hold the tear
    I stay there facing my fear
    I have to go
    I walk away
    but I can’t
    But I have to go
    The next place I go
    I hope it will be better than here
     
  5. Darkchaoself

    Darkchaoself What is this i dont even

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    HAHA gman U wanna be in this man? Lol well good luck, but with conan as judge your gonna be torn to pieces. Conan is ruthless.

    Heh its ok i guess :rolleyes:

    Its simple, but good, not much thinking required, but it tells the whole story in a good way.
     
  6. hortononon

    hortononon "I give em the hip then I take it away"-Jim Thorpe

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    Gman, ur in gl

    i like it but shouldnt u make it four stanzas?
     
  7. Gman101112

    Gman101112 New Member

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    i guess i see wut ur getting at there
     
  8. Nestharus

    Nestharus o-o

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    Sorry about this post, was going to delete it by I forgot about it. I had it spoiled because I was unsure if it was really that bad or not.

    Once again, my apologies

    Commenting on another's work should not be done unless that person truly wants comments.

    Harsh comments like the one done should not be done unless the person truly wants an honest and full response.

    I was working on another forum a little bit before I posted this message which was extremely harsh, word by word criticism. I was in that mindset.

    Once again, I apologize =)

    Also, some poems are written to be literal. Most music is infact literal and a lot of people greatly enjoy that. It's all about a person's own opinions and preferences.

    Some people enjoy symbolism and some are frustrated by it. All in all, to one person a poem can be one of the greatest works of all time and to another it isn't so great.

    What am I getting at here? I'm not quite sure. I guess the only thing that can really be criticized about any poem is the mechanics of the poem as that is the only thing not based on opinion but based on fact.

    GMan, with this in light, you posted a 9/10 poem, good job. I'll keep my own opinions out of my posts from now on ^_^

    Hopefully this remedies any ill feelings.

    Once again, I do apologize

    EDIT
    It seems that people have different feelings regarding this post. Some people feel that it was unjust that this post be deleted, that it was not a flame in any way, and that it should be fully allowed because of the support, reasons behind the argument, examples of how to improve, and so forth.

    I'm letting those people who are rating this edited post as bad now because it was deleted be heard.

    I explained fully why I deleted this post, and hopefully everyone understands everything that has been going on.

    Now, can we please move on? =)
     
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  9. Halahan

    Halahan To die will be an awfully big adventure.

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    That was quite a poem. not as good as yours... but very good.
    I'ma trying writing so new poetry... I think it'd be better then that one I originally submitted. second poem I'd written in years. I can't submit it in this one, but maybe another.
    lol where is Seth to bring you down from you're Pedestal? (He was a really great writer, admin who left for another forum site he created. I'm not insulting you or anything, just you're a really good writer and seems like you're on a Pedestal to me <3)
     
  10. Miz

    Miz Administrator

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    Shit I gave Conan 2nd to last place hes going to kill me in this contest
     
  11. Halahan

    Halahan To die will be an awfully big adventure.

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    rotfl. gl :D
     
  12. hortononon

    hortononon "I give em the hip then I take it away"-Jim Thorpe

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    well, entries are closed.. conan post ur results when ready, ill have mine up by 29th if not sooner,

    gl everyone!!!!!!!!!!!111!!!!!!!!!!!111!:)
     
  13. Darkchaoself

    Darkchaoself What is this i dont even

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    Rofl

    1 word. GG :p
     
  14. hortononon

    hortononon "I give em the hip then I take it away"-Jim Thorpe

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    Nestharus has been disqualified/banned from this contest for flaming on people's work.. his poem will not be judged he can join the next contest tho..
    ye be warned!​
     
  15. Halahan

    Halahan To die will be an awfully big adventure.

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    you better have consulted with conan... otherwise reconsider. he gave warning for if you did not want to read it his critique, and he warned the harshness of it.
     
  16. Ghan

    Ghan Administrator - Servers are fun Staff Member

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    > you better have consulted with conan

    He consulted with me. :)
     
  17. Halahan

    Halahan To die will be an awfully big adventure.

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    huh. don't know you as well :/ oh well... guess thats fine. seem you've been unusually active in this forum. inner writer emerging from within? :)
     
  18. hortononon

    hortononon "I give em the hip then I take it away"-Jim Thorpe

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    my results are in, please no posts saying i was unfair or bad at judging, i haven't judged many things, just deal with the results if u don't win better luck next time now..

    drumroll please...

    Rheias
    Emotion-15/20
    Flow- 10/20
    Originality- 15/20
    Grammar/Spelling- 10/10
    Word Choice- 7/10
    Visuals- 20/20

    Total: 82% B-



    Monsterous
    Emotion-20/20
    Flow- 19/20
    Originality- 18/20
    Grammar/Spelling- 9/10
    Word Choice- 9/10
    Visuals- 18/20

    Total: 93% A-



    Mizuio-Ken
    Emotion-15/20
    Flow- 15/20
    Originality- 18/20
    Grammar/Spelling- 9/10
    Word Choice- 7/10
    Visuals- 20/20

    Total: 84% B




    TrustFactor
    Emotion-19/20
    Flow- 10/20
    Originality- 19/20
    Grammar/Spelling- 8/10
    Word Choice- 6/10
    Visuals- 10/20

    Total: 72% C-




    Gman101112
    Emotion-20/20
    Flow- 12/20
    Originality- 10/20
    Grammar/Spelling- 6/10
    Word Choice- 4/10
    Visuals- 10/20

    Total: 62% D-

    now just wait for conan to come thro thnx for participating every1!!!
     
  19. Ghan

    Ghan Administrator - Servers are fun Staff Member

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    Ok. This thing with Nestharus has been blown out of proportion.

    Let.
    It.
    Go.

    It's not the end of the world. Nestharus is certainly welcome to come back in subsequent contests.

    Please stay on topic here.


    That is all.
     
  20. Gman101112

    Gman101112 New Member

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    awww craap i was the worst well i guess ill learn from my mistakes
     
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