Seth Cross Writing

[esb]

Lies to get the girls!!! I like it =D

 

[Chao]

I don't have to lie. I pretty much just walk up to whichever one I want and say "Now."
ANYWAYS, anyone else submitting a poem anytime soon? lol

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P.S. I'm not ACTUALLY that conceited.

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I'm substantially moreso.

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Nah, not really.

 

[Knight7770]

We have almost a whole month

 

[Seb!]

We have almost a whole month

Rome wasn't built in a day, my friend.

 

[kitkat24210]

Here's mine:

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Snow White lay in her coffin,
Pale as pale could be,
And then up rode the Prince,
Had he heard her silent plea?
"I've come to save you, Snow!"
He declared, as he kissed her nose.
"You cheating lying snake!" She said,
"I just saw you with Briar Rose!"

 

[Knight7770]

Rome wasn't built in a day, my friend.

Yeah, but once we submit our poems, we can't change them. Might as well use our time wisely

 

[Chao]

I wrote mine in a state of delirium.

 

[Sixth House]

This is my first attempt at poetry.
I do love to write, however.


Change My Attempt

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You keep dodging lights
Like a thief in the night
Dawn will rise and expose all the lies
You come and enter – willingly embrace
Karma’s kiss of withering decay
This dying youth of pleasured remedy
The fatal flaw in every plan
Is the assumption that you know more than your enemy
Falling through lines
One more breath destroys the best of you
The death of you

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"I am confident that if anyone actually penetrates our facades, even the most perceptive would still be fundamentally unprepared for the truth of The Sixth House."

 

[Knight7770]

This is my first attempt at poetry.
I do love to write, however.


Change My Attempt

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You keep dodging lights
Like a thief in the night
Dawn will rise and expose all the lies
You come and enter – willingly embrace
Karma’s kiss of withering decay
This dying youth of pleasured remedy
The fatal flaw in every plan
Is the assumption that you know more than your enemy
Falling through lines
One more breath destroys the best of you
The death of you

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"I am confident that if anyone actually penetrates our facades, even the most perceptive would still be fundamentally unprepared for the truth of The Sixth House."

...Which fairy tale/myth are you talking about here?

 

[Sixth House]

...Which fairy tale/myth are you talking about here?

Absolutely no idea. The subject stumbled me so I tried to write something I believed fit with it. It's cryptic so to speak.

If it's incorrect then ignore it. I though I would give poetry a shot.
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"I am confident that if anyone actually penetrates our facades, even the most perceptive would still be fundamentally unprepared for the truth of The Sixth House."

 

[DM Cross]

The poem has to fit the theme. You can't name the fairy tale or folklore [or anything, it seems] the poem is about, so we cannot allow it into the contest.

It was good, just not fitting

 

[Knight7770]

My entry:

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The Trojan Horse

The Greeks won the Trojan War,
With their horse, they passed the door,
Whereby they caused the war to be won,
But what if all this were undone?
Suppose the Trojans knew the Greeks’ plot,
With this knowledge, they may have caught
The Greeks, so secure in their creation,
Ready to destroy a once-proud nation.
Suppose the Greeks’ horse failed,
And their warriors had been unveiled.
Victory the Trojans would embrace,
And their state the Greeks would not erase.
Here is that story, so often told,
Yet in this story a new ending will unfold…

For the Greeks the war was dire,
They could not penetrate the Trojan empire.
Clever Ulysses contrived a plot,
“A great wooden horse shall be wrought!”
So saying, the Greeks began to toil,
And from mere wood a great horse uncoiled.
The inside was hollow, so as to allow
The Greek warriors to be endowed
With being effectively invisible,
So the Trojans saw not the thing so fatal.
The Greeks were hiding in their horse,
When they heard a dreadful discourse.
It was Laocoön, a priest of Neptune;
He created for the Greeks a great typhoon.
Throwing his lance at the hidden trap,
A noise was created which caused all to gasp.
And more the air of caution he lifts,
“I fear the Greeks, even when they offer gifts.”
Now all the Trojans were convinced
That Laocoön had truly evinced
The final plot which the Greeks tried,
Yet just then, someone espied
Two hideous beings of great stature;
Behold! they were fearsome adders.
Towards Laocoön they went,
On his destruction, they were bent.
Yet the will of Laocoön did not falter;
He stood like a statue atop an altar.
With his bare hands he encountered the snakes,
And with godly strength their backs he breaks.
All the Trojans stood in awe,
No more from him did they withdraw.
They erected a great and awful fire,
And the plot of the Greeks then went haywire.
From the great flame, the wooden horse burned,
And never again did the Greeks return.​

 

[Sixth House]

It was good, just not fitting

The fact that you think my poem was good makes me feel like a winner anyways.
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"I am confident that if anyone actually penetrates our facades, even the most perceptive would still be fundamentally unprepared for the truth of The Sixth House."

 

[Ninva]

You should really try to aim for that theme, Sixth House. Many of the other members can be shaky with the theme, and they usually win that way by being unique. You probably have the ability to produce something really good, Sixth. But I think you're simply masking your talent with a simple excuse. Challenge yourself, so you can learn and advance in your knowledge of literature.

Don't be afraid to fail sometimes. I always fail, which just inspires me to keep on going. But when I succeed, it's pretty a sweet feeling. I gotta admit.

 

[Sixth House]

Thanks for the motivation, Ninva.
Am I aloud to try another poem that actually fits the theme Seth Cross?
I'm sure I can come up with something.
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"I am confident that if anyone actually penetrates our facades, even the most perceptive would still be fundamentally unprepared for the truth of The Sixth House."

 

[DM Cross]

Yup.

 

[Sixth House]

Lets try this again!
It's an old Folklore about Cinderella.


To Cinderella

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Visually your stimulating to my eyes
Your love for affection is at a rise
To Cinderella, a syndrome for a price
The hellish life by each rythem
Has come to see your demise

As beautiful the way you are
It's so pitiful what you are
Should have seen this coming
All along

As vanities a weakness built to fleece the unique
To Cinderella, a syndrome full of lies
Your love for her will collide
Your insecurities are concealed by your pride
Pretty soon your ego will kill what’s left inside

Hopefully this is acceptable.​

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"I am confident that if anyone actually penetrates our facades, even the most perceptive would still be fundamentally unprepared for the truth of The Sixth House."

 

[Knight7770]

Lets try this again!
It's an old Folklore about Cinderella.


To Cinderella

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Visually your stimulating to my eyes
Your love for affection is at a rise
To Cinderella, a syndrome for a price
The hellish life by each rythem
Has come to see your demise

As beautiful the way you are
It's so pitiful what you are
Should have seen this coming
All along

As vanities a weakness built to fleece the unique
To Cinderella, a syndrome full of lies
Your love for her will collide
Your insecurities are concealed by your pride
Pretty soon your ego will kill what’s left inside

Hopefully this is acceptable.​

Very nice poem, although there were a few typos and possibly the forgetting of some verbs here and there (nothing major). It's better than mine :thup:

 

[Sixth House]

Very nice poem, although there were a few typos and possibly the forgetting of some verbs here and there (nothing major). It's better than mine :thup:

Thanks alot!
I still believe your poem is far more superior to mine.
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"I am confident that if anyone actually penetrates our facades, even the most perceptive would still be fundamentally unprepared for the truth of The Sixth House."

 

[Chao]

Pinocchio as a sex demon seems like a far less appealing choice all the time when I see what's being produced here