Rinpun
Ex TH Member
- Reaction score
- 105
Not really, I'm doing all sorts of things now so I don't have the time
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I'll accept that for Jessica, but you might consider showing her character a little bit more in the beginning.
"Everyone does it" is quite a lame excuse.
A tad more real? Uh...you do know there are entire towns that DON'T curse, right? They call it Christianity...followed the right way.
Kids may swear, but let's "face it", some don't. Some don't need to. NOBODY needs to. Therefore, there is no logical reason WHY you put that in there. But alas, be like everyone else in your town, don't follow your dream, whatever.
Who do you intend to read your book? You can't make a living as an author catering only to one little town of cursing. If you're going to get the attention of much more people, find those who would gather a much more off view "She cursed", like I said.
But I'm getting ahead of myself.
And everyone uses "she thought"? Not everyone speaks in double quotes, either, or explain their actions ("...!" Mr. Blah said with anger). It's a simple English rule. Follow it or not, but editors who are willing to put your book up ARE most likely going to chop off all this stuff.
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I'll accept that for Jessica, but you might consider showing her character a little bit more in the beginning.
"Everyone does it" is quite a lame excuse.
A tad more real? Uh...you do know there are entire towns that DON'T curse, right? They call it Christianity...followed the right way.
Kids may swear, but let's "face it", some don't. Some don't need to. NOBODY needs to. Therefore, there is no logical reason WHY you put that in there. But alas, be like everyone else in your town, don't follow your dream, whatever.
Who do you intend to read your book? You can't make a living as an author catering only to one little town of cursing. If you're going to get the attention of much more people, find those who would gather a much more off view "She cursed", like I said.
But I'm getting ahead of myself.
And everyone uses "she thought"? Not everyone speaks in double quotes, either, or explain their actions ("...!" Mr. Blah said with anger). It's a simple English rule. Follow it or not, but editors who are willing to put your book up ARE most likely going to chop off all this stuff.