Silverdale

[Miz]

Silverdale ​

Silverdale, a city that exists in the northern Midwest of the United States at a time of invention in the early Industrial Revolution. The city, as it's name suggests, is famous for the large quantity of silver that feeds the ever growing demands of the young United States, but a secret war has also consumed the city as creatures of the night, Werewolves or to be specific, Goldenback Werewolves, have invaded the city trying to damage the cities precious silver supply while avoiding hunters, armed with weapons and silver bullets designed to destroy them.
In this chaos a young lady, by the name of Ruth McCartney is pulled into this mysterious reality, as she is attacked and then suspected of killing an alpha male in a male werewolf pack, who now want her head as vengeance for their fallen comrade.


Goldenback Werewolves
"Americus Lycanthropes"
Goldenbacks or also commonly called: The American werewolf, are different from that of the European lycanthropes that plagued Europe for centuries. Unlike their European cousins, Goldenbacks have golden to light brown fur instead of the usual dark brown or gray. Goldenbacks also have the ability to change into werewolves every night and are able to control their bodies under most circumstances but their strength much like the European Werewolf depends on the phases of the moon. Meaning a Goldenback will be much weaker on a new moon then a full moon, this is why most attacks occur on the usual phase of full moon, giving the illusion that werewolves only change in their wolf-like form on a Full Moon Night. Another special trait of the Goldenbacks is their packs, unlike European werewolves that are usually loners; Goldenbacks attack, communicate and live through packs, usually containing all same gender members and are led by an alpha male or female, though some co-ed groups have been found.

The Silver Circle
The Silver Circle, a group of elite hunters whose numbers are unknown. What is known is that it originated in Central Europe, by Kings and Lords tired of werewolves and other supernatural creatures attacking their villages in the early dark ages. Over time the group expanded and became more powerful. Until the early days of the Industrial revolution, when murders involving a newly discovered breed of werewolves, the Goldenback Werewolves, that prowled their way through the continents of both North and South Americas. Attacking towns and even large cities while remaining undetected as more and more of these events became frequent the United States government found it necessary to get it involved and by hiring the Silver Circle to protect them as they did the Europeans and immediately a task force was sent over to start a new branch of the group, and end the reign of terror these creatures of the night had over the Americas.

Characters
Ruth McCartney
Ivan Trueblood
Victoria Trueblood
Leon
Andrew
Daniel
Otto
William
Elizabeth
Jasper Ware

 

[Dakho]

You set up a very interesting backdrop; one that I find quite appealing. The setting is great, and not an oft used one (all the better). As for the writing itself...

There are quite a few grammatical errors, which really breaks up the pace and ruins the scene you're trying to set. For example you use were instead of we're quite frequently, not a big thing, of course, but nevertheless its presence, to me, is distracting. The errors are mostly little things, and probably won't bother anyone but myself.

Overall it's pretty interesting, good luck with it.

 

[Miz]

You set up a very interesting backdrop; one that I find quite appealing. The setting is great, and not an oft used one (all the better). As for the writing itself...

There are quite a few grammatical errors, which really breaks up the pace and ruins the scene you're trying to set. For example you use were instead of we're quite frequently, not a big thing, of course, but nevertheless its presence, to me, is distracting. The errors are mostly little things, and probably won't bother anyone but myself.

Overall it's pretty interesting, good luck with it.

Yeah my own editing sucks, but I assumed it wasn't that bad. Though as you said the little errors are something that I easily look over, so I will try to get my friends who are on the grammar police to edit it.

Thanks for the comment, Chapter 1 is in the works.

 

[Miz]

Chapter 1 - Ruth is online on my portfolio site.

Yeah I know really late, I actually let this story brew in my mind and it kind of was forgotten for a little but its back on. So I hope to have Chapter 2 done in a few, no promises though xD

 

[DM Cross]

The way you wrote this, I thought you were writing an RP Take that as you see it to be taken...