The Art of Being Human

Ninva

Анна Ахматова
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The Art of Being Human

I know three thousand people
Who still speak well like you.
They breathe just like you too.

But something you don't
Understand is just
What I'm thinking:

It's not hostile.
It's not evil.

Now you can assume
All you want,
About the devils

In my head.
What you won't
Accept is my heart,

My soul, my spirit.
I'm not the devil --
Just a human.

What the most beautiful
thing about me is --
The way I speak

And the way I listen.
Do you hear it?
It's the music

Of the spirits
Who still speak today.
Though they are dead,

They keep on speaking.
They aren't devils --
Just humans.

And as a human
I want to speak
And listen.

Speak and listen.
 

DM Cross

You want to see a magic trick?
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I didn't really like the flow, but I think that is me being biased based upon what I know to be "my style" of poetry. You had sentences continuing through stanzas and I never do that. Even from line to line sentences are rare for me, but to have something go from stanza a to stanza b and be part of the same sentence...

You have to understand though that I was always taught and thus always thought of line breaks and stanzas as pauses, breaks in thought. So to me it looks like a run on sentence where you're pausing a bunch of times.

Overall though, the wording was pretty good and I got what you were talking about right away. I know that the first few lines where you're saying "people who speak well like you" got me thinking, but once I continued on, I realized what I was thinking about had NOTHING to do with what you were trying to say :D

I tend to have an... Old-fashioned means of talking and acting. I still hold doors open for the ladies, I use words like "sin" and "savior" in regular conversation, etc. etc. Not many people talk or act the way I do anymore and that's what it made me think of at first. But as I read on, I realized what you really meant, but I just thought it was interesting how you can preceive things so out of context.
 

Ninva

Анна Ахматова
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I tried to condense the stanzas so that the reader could read two lines at once. Usually I read a poem twice to get the flow, so I didn't think reading this poem to be much different. But I can understand how the flow may seem interrupted since I didn't conclude each stanza.

Glad you enjoyed it. ^_^
 
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