The Chronicles of Night and Day

Discussion in 'The Writer's Corner' started by Miz, Apr 21, 2007.

  1. Miz

    Miz Administrator

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  2. IKilledKEnny

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    Nice. I love the line "Tears Help the weakening Soul", I think it's great.
     
  3. Krys A Night

    Krys A Night Writer

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    I like all of your poems, they all flow very well. Revenge and Tears a little more easy to understand than After-Time.
     
  4. Miz

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    After Time is a Evangelion Style peom if you don't get me

    Watch the weridest Anime ever Evangelion
    Around the last 10 episodes it does that

    I don't usually like writing in Evangelion Style (Or Question Style) but It works
    I am taking suggestions of peoms it can be Nature or Chaos or Something Stress or w/e
     
  5. Halahan

    Halahan To die will be an awfully big adventure.

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    I thought I already commented on this saying quote ' Very good, you make it sound very nice even without any rhyme scheme.' did someone delete it? cause I know I posted it
     
  6. Miz

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    no i move that poem to this thread
     
  7. Pineapple

    Pineapple Just Smile.

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    peom=poem:D :)
     
  8. Halahan

    Halahan To die will be an awfully big adventure.

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    ya, just realized
     
  9. Mer_de_Noms

    Mer_de_Noms Certified Badfish

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    Although good, all of these poems seems to have the same depressed theme. Try and mix it up. Having a theme to your poetry is fine, just try and speak about the same thing in a different manner every time, so things don't seem so repetitious.
     
  10. Miz

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    Didn't you read above I can't really do happy poems they just don't turn out good
    but w/e because its my last day of school Most my Friend are leaving so I am posting a new peom
    Its happy but also kinda of sad


    EDIT: New Peom Posted
     
  11. BlueSin

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    Not to be an ass but:

    is

    I "get" your poems by the way, but I still don't like them as you said I would. As for constructive criticism, well I don't have much, poetry isn't my thing.
     
  12. Krys A Night

    Krys A Night Writer

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    The newest one that you put up, I like it. It has a slightly nostalgic feel to it, and I can relate to it right now, almost graduation high school.
     
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  13. Miz

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    Sin:
    Fixed the Grammar

    By the way My Poems are based on feelings so its more of a stronger poetry but thankyou :D

    Night:
    I hope your friends stay together
    but thats life which I am writing another peom because schools out I can post more often so stay more in contact

    Suggestions for peoms just give me the feeling and I'll try to put something together
     
  14. Halahan

    Halahan To die will be an awfully big adventure.

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    Very nice. There isn't much rhyming, but what I really love about them is they're still very interesting even without it. Great metaphors and such. You have a nice way of incorporating meaning into all of it.


    Sorry I haven't been to active on the helper lately, things have cropped up in my own life :eek:
     
  15. Miz

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    Thread Updated

    Added New Poem: :D Divine Love which has its own Thread but you can post comments here too

    Rating Stars Added: Took your Guys Rating

    And the Next Coming up Poem is there too
     
  16. elmstfreddie

    elmstfreddie The Finglonger

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    zomg -.-"
    I hate poetry. I don't know why, but anything meaningful is actually very annoying to me. I like literature that is very literal, and humorous preferably.
    As long as you enjoy it I guess o_O
     
  17. Miz

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    New Poem

    Heart Broken
    Which is werid after writing about Eternal Love
    But its for my Friend

    Please Tell me a Rating 1 - 5 (5 Being the Best)
    so I can post the Rating up There

    BTW
    I have many links up there now for many things that are related
     
  18. Krys A Night

    Krys A Night Writer

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    I like the new poem, it does fit in with the one before about eternal love because even with that there is still some sort of heart break that occurs, or has occured while on the search for eternal love.

    I give it 4/5 stars.
     
  19. 1JadedJen

    1JadedJen Send Lawyers, Guns and Money

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    There are humorists out there that write funny poems. Most of them write editorials for newspaper columns and do humor poetry/books on the side
     
  20. Miz

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    Update:
    I have to Update the Stars
    Because I had to merge them into one file so I could have more ratings

    Now I can have 30 ratings and may have more in the future :D

    EDIT: Ignore the Green around the 5 Stars I will try to fix that soon
    That is a Background Error which it won't blend in like its suppose to be
     

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