Here's my map. It's a short little movie, nothing fancy.
i thought yours was good except couple of things
1: wouldn't it be better to use "Transmissions" isntead of text for talking?
2: too slow at fighting ...got a bit boring when all they did was attack (No special bits) and text fast
3: good though
Edit: Mastah, where was the new ending? Didn't notice any diffrence...
Edit: Hm.. you know that the second dialog only apears if you take the attack command? And isn't the new ending the extended one? .
the word "Oops" applies to this situation t hxs