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Because none of us are as cruel as all of us.
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Lies to get the girls!!! I like it =D
We have almost a whole month
Yeah, but once we submit our poems, we can't change them. Might as well use our time wiselyRome wasn't built in a day, my friend.
...Which fairy tale/myth are you talking about here?This is my first attempt at poetry.__________________
I do love to write, however.
Change My Attempt
You keep dodging lights
Like a thief in the night
Dawn will rise and expose all the lies
You come and enter – willingly embrace
Karma’s kiss of withering decay
This dying youth of pleasured remedy
The fatal flaw in every plan
Is the assumption that you know more than your enemy
Falling through lines
One more breath destroys the best of you
The death of you
"I am confident that if anyone actually penetrates our facades, even the most perceptive would still be fundamentally unprepared for the truth of The Sixth House."
Absolutely no idea. The subject stumbled me so I tried to write something I believed fit with it. It's cryptic so to speak....Which fairy tale/myth are you talking about here?
The fact that you think my poem was good makes me feel like a winner anyways.It was good, just not fitting
Very nice poem, although there were a few typos and possibly the forgetting of some verbs here and there (nothing major). It's better than mine :thup:Lets try this again!
It's an old Folklore about Cinderella.
To Cinderella
Visually your stimulating to my eyes
Your love for affection is at a rise
To Cinderella, a syndrome for a price
The hellish life by each rythem
Has come to see your demise
As beautiful the way you are
It's so pitiful what you are
Should have seen this coming
All along
As vanities a weakness built to fleece the unique
To Cinderella, a syndrome full of lies
Your love for her will collide
Your insecurities are concealed by your pride
Pretty soon your ego will kill what’s left inside
Hopefully this is acceptable.
Very nice poem, although there were a few typos and possibly the forgetting of some verbs here and there (nothing major). It's better than mine :thup: