[Poem] Hard to Evil

[jonadrian619]

Here's just a long poem I've written, just need some feedback and comments..

Hard to Evil

Life is hard in these dark times.
The prices are gettin' higher.
The queue in the market becomes longer
Grandpa is sick, don't have cash to buy medicine.
This is uber crap.. higher bills that bill us out?
Our family is getting poorer.
I couldn't do any better to get some cash..

My brother went insane..
Our prophecies were on collision,
"That ain't gonna be true bro"
"Hell yeah it ain't in your brain, but it is real, real!"
"I'll do whatever it takes to cash in!"
And so he went out as an illegal recruiter.
He tricked 19 people including my sister..
Finally he was caught.. charged with estafa
But he's on death row in Bilibid prison,
The main horror in town.

How 'bout the rest of us?
I cried, as usual, lost one good soul.
I blame him for his actions as a sinner.
Life is really hard these days.
Just a guy who keeps reminiscing.
Playing Dota in the black market.
Soon I'll regret the regrettable.
What can I do then (whispering 'crap')?​

The title seems a bit weird to you, but it means a transition from Hardships to evil

 

[Halahan]

It was kind of odd, and in some parts it didn't flow all that well but I liked it. gj

 

[Seb!]

I actually liked the flow, it sounded nice offbeat. The DOTA reference did it for me.