Need advices on loading screen.

[Kazuga]

Hello there, my map is not far from completed so I thought I should make a loading screen for it. Now I need you to tell me what you think of the two samples or if you think I should go with something else.

The map is called Robot Wars, and is a hero arena type of map were you play as a tank. For more info click me.

Anyway here are the samples I have made for now:

Haven't added texts etc yet since I want to complete the image first.
/Kazuga

 

[Septimus]

The first screenshot is rather abnormal, as for the second screenshot. it look good.

 

[Kazuga]

Well, I wasn't happy with the other two so I just made a new one. Personally I think it looks a lot better, but if you have any opinions/suggestions for improvement please post them here.

 

[NoxMortus]

For the tips, you should put them into seperate sentences around the image, rather than have them in one big paragraph like that imo

 

[Kazuga]

Could you specify that a bit more? I don't quite understand where you want me to put them...

 

[NoxMortus]

On the left side, you have pointers on how to play. I think you should make them into bullet points spread across the image.