Poetry Contest 2!

[Halahan]

No, a trophy that I had that I was going to send to the winner to be used as an avatar, but now I'm not.
Anyway, the conversation is getting a little off-topic since we already decided not too.

Judgment Day approaches.

 

[Miz]

which BTW I maybe gone July 10 and don't know when sectionals end so I'm posting my judging late night July 9th so make sure you are ready before the deadline

 

[DM Cross]

Anyone can fake a custom title, too...

 

[Halahan]

that's true. Oh well... besides, most people in the Writer's Corner, or the main users will probably know who actually won, so anyone who fakes it will probably get unofficially subtracted rep by some other users and feel their wrath, so most people prob wouldn't want to do it.
But your right, anyone could fake it. Whatever the judges and sudden death judges want to do. I trust Krys and Seth. Mizuio I'm not so sure...:nuts:

 

[Miz]

When I say title i didn't mean custom title lol

Why don't you trust me ><

 

[Halahan]

Lol, ironic the reason I didn't have time or didn't feel like entering the first poetry contest is who I got the feelings/Inspiration from for my poem now. Funny how it works out like that.

 

[jonadrian619]

Here's my poem... Remember I write only short poems with lot's of meaning (3-4 stanzas), but I'll try to make longer ones....

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Blood and Fire​

The fires of Hell are burning
Destroying anything in it's path
But when mortals venture into dark places
The light of fire brightens their path
But the light of heaven, more brighter it is

The fire of the candle seems to give life
Death arises if the flames are gone
The flames still burns brightly
Until the spirit of mortals rest

The blood gives mortal life
It is also the source of demonic evil
It gives lust to anyone who is weak-minded
Until blood corrupts their own spirits

The flame of life brightens from within
Strengthening the mortal soul
The blood of mortals, running in their veins​

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This is my entry. I made it 3 days ago, in 2 hours with the ideas, since I've never been online for quite some time.

 

[DM Cross]

You're in! Good luck.

 

[hortononon]

Would you?

I'm in, but i prolly wont win cuz this is one of the first poems ive written, so id love advice on it
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The reasons we do right and wrong
Evil lies within us
Some rise above it, others are caught
They're fish who grab for bait

They have a choice to stay or run
A stranger holds a gift
To run will free you of the darkness
To stay you have the gift

Something makes you wonder on
Something makes you yearn
You stay because of evil's clutch
You let it take your mind

This thing will show through all of life
It cannot be contained
It can be scratched, it can be scarred
But never will it end​

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If you can't figure out the feeling, which isn't too hard too, you can ask

 

[Halahan]

That's easy, Greed.
But very good, I really liked it. definitely one of the best of the poetry contest.

 

[hortononon]

lol thankyou

but actually i was going for temptation/curiosity, u were close enough tho

 

[Miz]

I can't wait till a user is host lol

 

[Halahan]

what, like horton?
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comes off more as greed, like the lines

>"Evil lies within us"

>"to run will free you of the darkness
To stay you have the gift"

>"You stay because of evil's clutch
You let it take your mind"

 

[hortononon]

alright then.. but greed and temtation are kinda linked.. --

 

[DM Cross]

I can't wait till a user is host lol

You're a user. You're hosting.

No waiting required.

 

[Miz]

Well I do like most of these but some of you didn't really get the feeling or emotion well because most of you are new to this topic I would be a total Jerk and mark you that hard...

 

[hortononon]

but...

(does that include me?)

 

[DM Cross]

You're judging a poetry contest. Not a popularity contest If something does not adhere to the rules we set up, mark them accordingly. Don't be mean, don't be nice.

Be right!

 

[Miz]

Well I wasn't that nice
But I'm one of those people that is kinda hard to notice really that many grammar mistakes and most of them were original
so I guess I'll submit my score to the other judges so no one will know this early
But I may PM each one of you Comments of your poem... I will be gone Thursday Friday Saturday and maybe Sunday for Sectionals (in Swimming)

I will be packing on Wednesday so I may not be online to see the winner but don't worry I will be here for the next contest (hopefully)

 

[Halahan]

Krys doesn't seem very active lately... she hasn't even commented on this yet.

4 more days everybody, good luck