"Stumble across a barren isle in desolation, to pray to a porcelain god for a cure or vaccination"
"except for an empty bottle clutched in fist; A remedy of disconnection."
This is brilliant, I would tell you what you need to improve, but I have no idea what it would be. Good job.
I'm on a page about incorrect corrections, and spent the better part of like two hours trying to get someone to understand that -5^2 = -25, not 25, and then that post had comments get reposted because that group is self sustaining, and that person was in turn trying to explain what I just explained to them. And I'm taking that as a victory