Scrambled Words

[TrustFactor]

On The Road

out on the road
going on my own
learning new things as i go
trying to live with the strength in my heart
on the road
day by day
let my legs take me
take me on this long journey
a journey of no return
on the road again
time to let this all go
i'm on my way now
legs, its time to let me go

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Finding The Real You

Searching in my life again, a nothing to the people i've come to know
looking for that one thing
that anything that comes my way
yet still searching
it stares me right in the eyes
is it you?
i'm not sure
shall i search more or look through?
i know your there looking for me
pull me though
this search needs to be over
i've missed you for so long
don't let me go
pull me out
set me free and
save me from me
fly away with me and no one else till i have to search for you again

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UnNamed

Thoughts racing through the mind
written down in highly expression able sounds
the intake is so easy, but the outtake is too hard
the thoughts are too incomparable to the talks
although they are impressionable
they are thoughts
only on thing will remain the same
every though is different, but not the whole

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UnNamed 2

for the rotten pasts to the new beginnings
there are always things that will need to be fixed
the apathy in our voices to the love stuck in a spiral
the burden of the what if thoughts doesn't drown my love away
if i knew the right things to say
i wouldn't be mad for the small improper things
but i know that i'm in love
and that things will change
for a better end for a better day
the apathy of this love will change
and our improper thoughts will be no more

 

[Halahan]

these are good. I like them.

>edit
I reread em, I like them better there understandable but still deep

 

[elmstfreddie]

I like it because it's understandable..
Most poetry is like
"Here, I've written a bunch of crap! I mean, it's deep, and deep people will understand it"
which pisses me off. It leaves 99% of the meaning to rely on the reader, which is stupid.
*sigh* this is why I don't appreciate a lot of poetry.

(I'm in this part of the forums because I'm very bored )

 

[Halahan]

A lot of poetry isn't necessarily for other people to read, and therefore if there are a lot of metaphorical meanings and stuff, it might just be for the writer and he would understand it and he's just trying to get emotion out.
(tell me if you don't understand that)

 

[DM Cross]

Not as good as Seth's, but he's a master, these are still good. I like them.

That should never come into play with critiquing another person's work. Don't EVER let me see ANYONE comparing people's writing like this.

This is one of the reasons, if you read post 1 of my poetry thread, I said that thread was a long time coming. Because I didn't want stuff like that to happen.

 

[Halahan]

I didn't realize, it was a stupid thing to do. All Poetry is different, its hard to compare. I had just been reading yours and was still caught up in yours. sorry <3

 

[TrustFactor]

well thank you all for the citicisim? lol
uhm..
this wasn't supossed to be an argument lol
but thanks for those who did give me some criticisim