The Lonely Life

[Feralex]

This is a dark poem but i hope you still like it. The title is just meh but i cant come up with a better one.
Criticism welcomed

Life is the cycle that’ll forever go on,
And it allows us to suffer till the last breath is drawn.
But is a life worth living if you feel nothing but pain?
If the tears of your eyes host an endless rain?

The smile on your face is erased by sorrows,
And will remain undone for countless tomorrows.
Ripping and tearing inside in your mind,
Driving you mad and make you go blind.

Soon you feel the chilling embrace,
Of the loneliness seeking the faceless face.
Now you’re left in the world to remain all alone,
Only to live and survive on your own.

And in the absence of love and in the silence of fear,
The meaning of life becomes absolute clear.
It’s the only adventure where death is the key,
Because only through darkness will you ever be free...

 

[Ninva]

Punctuation makes things easier to read! :thup:

I like it.

 

[Feralex]

Punctuation makes things easier to read! :thup:

Mkay ive editited it now, thanks for the advice

I like it.

Thanks
:thup:

 

[Seb!]

Very, very nice. One of my favorite parts, as Ninva mentioned, was the punctuation.

Plus rep.

 

[Zakyath]

You've got talent, boy. You really do.