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Don

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:::Here it comes:::

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Wasn't that painfull, her pencil went right in my hand and unfortunatly, i made the big mistake of punching her. How all this happened? Here comes my little story.

My mother just gave me 10$ so me and my friends could go on and buy some candy, corner main St and Robert Av. We were 3, completly under self control, we were planning on buys some sour candies to give us a boost. Mother was always repeating <<Eat sugar, get sick, eat well, get tall>> and God knows why, i wanted to become tall. Once we entered the shop, i first looked up at the porn magazines, i was becoming hot, we could see these round boobs and perfect tits on top of the front page, sexy wasn't even the word to describe the girl. Slowly but surely, i walked, with the eyes pointed on the magazine, to the candies corner.

Oh, my eyes were hurting, soo much kinds, from gums to lolipops, the choice would be hard. It took me 5 minutes before remembering my mother's favorite sentence. Then i looked back and said, with the 3,33 dollars in my hands, <<I WANT 2 CARROTS>>. Suprisingly, my friends didn't even turn their heads, stick on the candies, they couldn't be distracted from them.

I brang my carrots home, started to eat them. Father, as usual, watching the newest T.V. show, was not going to listen to me, mother, washing the clothes while doing the same thing with the dishes, nothing could make her move from her original applications, washing, working, sleeping, washing, working, sleeping, washing, ..... I was a little tired of it but couldn't do anything.

Then i thought, my sister, what would she say?

Went to the second floor, she was writing a story, how nice! I thought about annoying her, making some jokes about her hair and her small boobs, she always hated that. But time had come for me to be listened. I started to talk about my 3 carrots to her, she was surely not listening. Subject from subject, i started to talk about her oily hair, how disgusting they were. <<Shut it dumass, shw said>>. With all my strenght, i answered <<Are all these words coming from your small breasts, that's why they are soo small, loosing weight when you say a bad word?>>. Now, she turned her head, looking at me with some dark eyes. She started to scream, saying i was an idiot and took her pencil the wrong side and put it right in my hand, on both side, there was an hole. I started to cry and punshed her, twice, before kicking her 3 times in the face.

Mother and father came, we were both crying because of what we did. Our two parents, a few weeks later, came to a decision, army was the only solution. But at 10, was that legal? No, my sister was going there, pheww, i thought i would never see my parents again. Happy, i was going down when they both said <<Jacob, there is no use of going away since you are staying here without any visits or any calls for one complete year!!!>>.

Oh no, trapped here, why did i do that. My parents were vers severe and i couldn't make them change their minds.

It's only a year later, when my sister came back, that i could go and play with my friend. Of course, i had to catch back what i lost in one year of school, loosing most of my friends. Thrust me, i will never do this again!

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This is one story i wrote for a friend a few days ago.

He asked me ''could you do something idiot that is not animation nor TV show, something like a story?''

And i said yes, this came out of my heads like 3 days after he asked such a dumb thing

Read and C&C would be nice as like as mistake correction (if you see any lol).
 

Sil3nt

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Well theres a lot of grammatical and spelling errors. Some sentences don't make sense. You should also use I instead of i, don't ask me why.

Instead of using <<>> to incase speech, use ""

Also this part: "We were 3, completly under self control"
Did you mean "free"? I find it hard to believe 3 year olds would be looking at those type of magazines.
 

Don

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going to fix!

and i meant to say we were 3 guys, all under self control!!
 

thewrongvine

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Rofl, yeah, please fix the grammar. When starting a new speech from someone, skip a line.
 

Don

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OH MY!

just figured that i made a big mistake when editing pressing cancel instead of save!! bang bang, might re-do it if i have time!
 
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